Falling through a, blackened, sickened arc
Lovelorn angel, frightened, poisoned, dark
A tyburn is a six line poem with a set syllable count. The first four lines rhyme, with 2 syllables each and are all descriptive words. The last two lines rhyme, with 9 syllables each and incorporate the 1st, 2nd, 3rd, and 4th lines as the 5th to 8th syllables.
I liked the other one better, probably because you didn't follow the exact rules to it, therefore making it flow a bet better. However this one still gets a 5/5 from me, considering the fact that it's well written and if I were a fan of tyburn's I think that I'd truly enjoy the read.
I really learn a lot from reading your poems. This one is interesting, don't really know much about these types, but the way you describe it seems nice. The poem itself is well structured and rhymed nicely. Another job well done 5/5
I really like this style, it's an interesting one but I don't think many people pull it off nicely and that you did. I love the dark angel topic this poem really hits theheart for me as it's a nickname for my boyfriend. I loved the word choice they were dark and deep holding so much emotion. Well done on creating an amazing poem. Keep on writing you have talent. ~Mel