Dirtied up memories (contest)

by Choose xX Alex Xx Life   Oct 6, 2007


Reminiscing;
Far from missing,
The monster that she used to be.
Mind playing on the thoughts
Of dirtied up memories.

Past creeps up and haunts her present,
Blocking out, only brings more pain.
Why did she lie? To their heart, their face.
Things shall never be the same.

Her mother, everyone, her very best friend,
Even hurting her boyfriend along the way.
Lies covered up by worse lies and hurt
This girl is high on the dirty memory.

Please give me your thoughts thank you xxx

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  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I liked this poem but I think the earlier one was a bit better. I liked the stanza and the mood but the dead man one brought you more into the character good job Though. Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by the come back

    In my opinion some ryhmes are pushed.....^_^ 4/5 that only my opinion..

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    "Past creeps up and haunts her present,
    Blocking out, only brings more pain.
    Why did she lie? To their heart, their face.
    Things shall never be the same."
    the highlight of the entire poem these words are deep and powerful, as far as the rest of the poem the emotion is strong, the flow is flawless and the word chpice is good 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    "Past creeps up and haunts her present,
    Blocking out, only brings more pain.
    Why did she lie? To their heart, their face.
    Things shall never be the same."

    Wow, breathetaking! that one hit me the most. luv it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Good!

    This is one didn't caught my attention well, but i can see much image and a hidden message on it.

    "Reminiscing;
    Far from missing"

    i think this line is the best of all of lines, simple words yet so descriptive in a very way.

    Keep it up!

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