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by HaileyHelen   Nov 2, 2007


This is for my baby! I Love you!

Not all broken hearts belong to you
isn't that what you said
and you loved broken things
Because someone had to fix them
You gave me the picture
Of him giving her his heart
If only I had known
That that would be the start
You gave me the picture
Of a man on a cliff
Watching the butterflies
Wishing they were him
If only I had known
That he was truley you
Then I'd understand
What happened with me and you
Then the other picture
Saying distance meant nothing
If only I had known
That with you
It would be true!

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  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Aww, this is so beautiful *tear*!!! It showed so much emotion and I can tell you're in love. Great poem. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by Vincent Thornsberry

    If only we could know in an instant if the one we love is our true love. I loved this one. 6/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Hmm .. interesting piece. I have to be honest ... the flow was shaky and there were parts that words did not fit.

    "If only I had known
    That that would be the start"

    ^I do no think the repitition of the word "that" helps the poem at all. I understand it fits in and makes sense, but it throws off the flow and is not effective.

    Overall, it was fresh read and the storyline was new and interesting. Good job. *4/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is the best in the three I read so far. The rhymes are more shown here. The flow goes nicely and the choosing of words is warm and simple. Nice work 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    Beautiful absolutely beautiful

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