My World

by Finalgravedigger   Nov 3, 2007


My world

Trying with great might
I bare arms in this everlasting fight
pushing for high hopes
even though the same thing always shows.

All efforts put down to rest
in there tombstones
inscribed I tried my best.

But I just cant give in
having everlasting ammunition
guides my soul within
as I have to duel

My ideals are above all
so caught in this vortex of
never ending rises and falls.

Having life as an enemy
and will as my friend
giving ups not an option
Ill go till the end.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Evil One

    Very good poem, keep writing

  • 16 years ago

    by XxLovelyBlackRosesxX

    I LOVE THIS ONE VERY MUCH SO

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like rhyming in first stanza, because it isn't original, but rest of this poem is truly excellent. I like topic and you wrote it on very good way.

    -My ideals are above all
    so caught in this vortex of
    never ending rises and falls.-

    ^This stanza is so powerful! I like how you described emotions and atmosphere that you created in whole piece is great, well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Nice vocabulary it helps express the poem with another level of depth.
    keep writing and thanks for the comment
    4.5
    :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Ben

    This really touched my heart

    5/5

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