Empty Suitcase

by Hannah Lizette   Dec 13, 2014


These words have been
stuck in the depths
of darkness,
crumpled beneath
unbuttoned laundry
and mosaic memories.

I've spent

hours
days
months
years

soaking stains
that inspired a
clothes line of
parched metaphors;
trying to iron
our antiquity
into an arrow
pointing me
in your direction.

Always
folding what's left
of you into an
empty suitcase.

*club challenge

Copyright 2014: Hannah K.

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  • 7 months ago

    by pmmurphy

    I am not sure what the challenge was. But this poem was fun to read :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Hannah this is wonderful. Written so elegantly. You say so much without saying much at all because the emotion runs deep making it really powerful.

    These words have been
    stuck in the depths
    of darkness,
    crumpled beneath
    unbuttoned laundry
    and mosaic memories.
    ^^
    Love this opening. It's very relatable. Words being stuck anywhere is bad but for them to be stuck in the darkness and crumpled beneath laundry shows that they have been stuck in your mind for so long and need to come out.

    I've spent

    hours
    days
    months
    years
    ^^
    Spending any length of time dwelling over past times or good/bad memories is no good because it gets us nowhere (and I know that from experience) especially when the dwelling has been done for some time. What helps (though hard) is to try moving on.

    soaking stains
    that inspired a
    clothes line of
    parched metaphors;
    trying to iron
    our antiquity
    into an arrow
    pointing me
    in your direction.
    ^^
    This is my fave stanza. The imagery here is perfectly written. I can imagine a Person badly unable to control the tears and wiping the away (or not) onto clothes possibly clothes of those of a person they once loved dearly and pegging out the clothes to dry so the tears don't stain then trying to iron out creases, of past memories but it makes it hard as everything points back to them. Beautiful but so sad.

    Always
    folding what's left
    of you into an
    empty suitcase.
    ^^
    Wonderful ending.

    Em

  • 2 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    I thought this was very clever... I loved it
    It hits the heart so raw... Yet your words were so delicate....

    Pieces like this can inspire people... A simple object
    But worded right can bring out such a beautiful and well written piece...

    You never disappoint such a talent amazing.

  • 3 years ago

    by shadow

    Love the metaphors!

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is really good Hannah, pretty unique as I've never seen anyone incorporate laundry in a poem. I believe this is saying, you have had words deep inside of you but you could not get them out, because your mind was elsewhere. Your life is so busy those thoughts are packed up somewhere in a suitcase, ready to leave. I like this for it's creative metaphor and catchy words. You often make the reader think about your thought provoking thoughts, you say so much in so little. That's what gets me :). 5/5

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