Someday I will Open My Eyes

by Kaylee   May 10, 2006


Drowning within sea of obscurity,
walking but never on ground.
My footsteps echo inside my mind,
on no account reaching ears.

Beyond one shadow resides
minute clusters, touching is futile.
But voices, whispering winds
of nightmare, tuned feeble radios.

Tingle, electric static
jolting through veins.
Scanning surroundings.
Weightless child.
Restricted movement
but feeling that shock.

Once...

Wetness streaming down
on face, but I am not crying.

Are they tears?

A gentle breeze makes strands
of my hair move a bit.

Is that breathing?

My hand being lifted through
the dark. Please do not let me go.
Warmth starting through fingertips
then traveling down my heart.

Voices, antenna straightened,
strong but silent in one moment.
Ticking, where time is passing.
Seconds...hours...how long?

Someday I will open my eyes.

Insipired by a television show in which someone is in a coma.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    *mind blowing. lol sorry for the typo.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    *mind blowing. lol sorry for the typo.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Wow the imagery in this poem is mine blowing. It was written so beautifully, I love it. It's amazing how specific things could make us ponder about life. 5/5 Keep it up and thank you for your criticism on my poetry, I made some changes.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Very nice poem Kaylee. I really liked the metaphors and images you brewed with your words. Very well chosen and formatted. The small things count big in the end. Keep on writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by Live, Laugh, Love

    O wow for being based on a television show. Great write hun.