Will you still love me tomorrow?

by Lonely Rider   Mar 13, 2009


Will you still love me tomorrow?(Nove - Otto)

Years welcome with wrinkled embrace,
blossoms have withered, shrinking grace,
from destiny, smiles I borrow,
and watch them shimmer in your eyes,
moment enclosing for goodbyes,
will your heart then drown in sorrow?
Uncertainty clouds, dream sublime,
with unceasing rhythm of time,
Will you still love me tomorrow?

**Nove Otto
The Nove Otto poetry form was created by Scott J. Alcorn. It is a nine-lined poem with 8 syllables per line (isosyllabic). The rhyme scheme is as follows: aacbbcddc.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Not Enough

    Wow, now that is excellent. I definitely couldn't get away with writing in a style like that, but you did it. And that last line is absolutely amazing. Very well done. This is a definite 5/5.

    Soda E>

  • 15 years ago

    by Fire Catches

    Wonderfully written!
    I think you mastered Nove Otto!

    10/5 =]
    Keep Writing!

  • 15 years ago

    by The Prince

    Excellent work:

    'Years welcome with wrinkled embrace,'

    'Wrinkled' gives me an image of age, and the echo of that first word 'years' seem to connote the idea of lasting? Lovely word use.

    'blossoms have withered, shrinking grace,'

    The rhyme was so subtle. It's great when you can read a poem and not predict the rhyme. Usually it's predictable but you made it fit completely. Also fitting syllables like that was good work too. I'm glad you said withered instead of wilted. :)

    'from destiny, smiles I borrow,
    and watch them shimmer in your eyes,'

    I'm starting to love this form, it sounds so beautiful when read. Or that could just be your words doing that, but I found it incredibly easy to read. I love this bit, it's sentimental. 'Shimmer in your eyes' could have been cliche but it wasn't, good work fitting that in.

    'moment enclosing for goodbyes,
    will your heart then drown in sorrow?'

    I thought these two lines fitted in with the poem but if it was in any other form or if your poem wasn't do forgivably beautiful then it would be cliche.

    'Uncertainty clouds, dream sublime,
    with unceasing rhythm of time,
    Will you still love me tomorrow?'

    I might attempt this form myself! Brilliant ending! I liked how the title appeared at the end but I found myself predicting it to be in the next line, which took the punch out of it a bit. It's only minor though and I thought this was a beautiful poem, worthy of praise.

    Well done on a lovely write!

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Beautiful poem dear, as always you amaze me with your selection of words and unique way of expressing. Great write indeed

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the form and I also like the message that lies within. Have to try this form one of
    these days..A sentimental write..take care.