To keep low synergy:
at Christmas, meet at the isthmus.
A brine labyrinth for you and yours,
because this me was never mine.
Still counting sheep? Oh restless sleep.
A maritime landscape... or-
Portrait number two.
Its so contradictory, yet deliberately put..
im throwing a party in my head.
Penned very well, and really deep as in the context is structured which means it needs a little more concentration in understanding the meaning,
I did like this and loved the thoughtfulness it left afterwards
Reading this for the first time was a very interesting experiance although I didnt grasp the meaning right at the bat. Reading it the second time was even better because I could see the clever tricks you put in there to create such a unique piece. It read so flawlessly with no interruptions in flow although the train of thought was interrupted. Reading poetry whose meaning isnt obvious at a glance is very appealing beause the reader has to do some thinking while reading it to understand whats going on.
This is the type of poem that stays with the reader after they finish and keepts them pondering...I really did enjoy it. It was different and quite refreshing.
I really like your poem. I think its different but its really good. It's quick and clean and I like that. I think its clever and a little hard to figure out. I think your writing is very good and can't wait to see more from you.