A Child's Prayer

by AlaSkA   May 14, 2007


Now i lay me down to sleep
If we perished,
Would our memories be cherished?
I pray the lord my soul to keep
Id trade sunlight,
For Grey-blue eyes & dark skies.
If i should die before i wake
Promise me you'll survive,
To bury me.
I pray the lord my soul to take
...amen

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  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was really good, so short yet spirited and sweet. Shows alot of simplistic emotion that children feel.
    Loved it
    love Tara

  • 14 years ago

    by My Mistakes

    Intersting.....it was well writtin, i like it. so you know...you poem made me fell like qustioning the reality of god....dont think thats what you were aiming for but thats how i felt

  • 14 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Does the word "PLAGIARISM" happen to have a meaning here?

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Ohh so beautiful... such wonderful lines...
    very refreshing poem...

    loved it...

    keep writing...

  • 14 years ago

    by Void

    Well, I might as well come out and say it. I don't mean to, but I do pay attention to grammar. I used to be horrible at it, and I still have some issues with it; thus, in my attempt to better my knowledge of it, alot of my attention is focused on grammatical errors.
    That, in itself, distracted me from your words... If I knew it was just me that felt that way about reading poetry, I wouldn't be telling you this. I know alot of people who give a harsher critique because of grammar - and I think you would do much better in provoking thought, if you just fixed it up a bit.

    To get on with it though...

    I like that you took a well known poem and made it into something like this though. Those of us who recognize it might appreciate it for everything it is, or of course shut it down and fight over it. Both, if you ask me, are a form of attention given to your writing - so I think you may just get all you want, if you're positive that all you want from your poetry is your readers to think and react. I guess I can come to the conclusion, that you did a pretty good job here.
    Not one of my favourites from you though.