Winters Death

by Cindy   Apr 15, 2009


Winters Death

Howling frigid north winds cease
Long cold nights come to an end
Sparkling blanket melts away
Feels like losing an old friend

Erased snowy wonderland
Frost gone from my window pane
Stark branches reach for the sky
Eagerly waiting spring rain

Blocking warmth of the sun
Time to pull closed the shades
Grieving my winters death
As life for me now fades

Written for a club contest

By Cynthia Graver
March 28, 2009

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  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Howling frigid north winds cease
    Long cold nights come to an end
    Sparkling blanket melts away
    Feels like losing an old friend "

    These opening words are so real and vivid, they just strike the reader and fill them with a sense of sadness and loss. Great rhyme and flow so far.

    "Erased snowy wonderland
    Frost gone from my window pane
    Stark branches reach for the sky
    Eagerly waiting spring rain"

    My only suggestion here would be in the fourth line to add a "for" after "waiting", to me it would sound better.

    I did like "erased snowy wonderland", very well worded and original.

    "Blocking warmth of the sun
    Time to pull closed the shades
    Grieving my winters death
    As life for me now fades"

    This is such a sad ending, and I thought the concept of this piece was touching and made me think. I don't think I've read a poem like this...

    I really did not like the second line to much, to me it would sound better if reworded to this (pull closed just sounded awkward to me)

    "It's time to close the shades"

    Or something to that extent.

    Otherwise, great work, you words really got to me and indeed you got your message across clearly. Beautiful write.

    Take care and God bless you, child of God!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Written like a true snow lover! I for one am glad to see the snow end and the Spring sunshine again...keep those shades open and enjoy the day!

  • 14 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Cindy,
    I am sorry I didn't comment on this earlier. I guess because I talk to you on the phone so much and think it's already done. You know how much I loved this write. I know what your winter means to you and thought it was a very clever write considering it was for Spring Fling. Wonderful Job
    Love ya,
    Kay

  • 14 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Well Cindy as usual you have proven why I like your poems so muchhhh, because they are so darn good. I always have had a fondness for your works and this one is no different. i feel the same way about winter. too long but then I hate to see it go. The first few days of spring find ways to change my passion for winter. nice write bud.......

  • 14 years ago

    by anand singh

    Cindy, you have described one of natures most beautiful scene in a sad but beautiful way.
    This is superbly penned and the sad tone add so much to what you feel about the change of one season to the next.
    I enjoy reading this wonderful piece.
    Keep up the great work my friend.
    Paul...