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by Cindy Apr 6, 2011
Nature, environment /
Field of Dreams (Haiku)
Green grass bends and sways
Bright colored wild flowers
Enjoy the warm sun
Written by: Cynthia Graver
March 24, 2011
by Ben Pickard
This is beautiful, but I am going to annoy you here, but I know you won't mind as it's meant in the best of ways.
"Wild" is one of those words that sounds like it has two syllables when you say it but in fact has one, bringing the syllable count of line 2 down to 6 instead of 7.
What about changing wild to "untamed" - keeping the "wild" theme but just pushing that syllable count up? Just a suggestion and it is entirely up to you.
In truth, it is a word that baffles me - I had to check to make sure!
Anyway, the imagery and beauty of this piece are wonderful - all the very best,
by cassie hughes
Lovely. Peaceful and perfectly evocative of a beautiful summers day in the country. :)
This created a lovely picture in my mind... Serene, pretty and calm! :)) Thanku Cindy! - Loved this by you.
by Lady Nik
Such a peaceful poem :] Thanks for sharing it with us. Nice work deary. -Nik
Cindy, I could see the field, the flowers, grass swaying with the wind. You did what was intended with the few words allowed, you gave the reader a wonderful image to take with them.