Dreamless

by Lonely Rider   Dec 14, 2010


In the wake of long shadows
rose the moon, beside shreds of
-dreamless stars-

tracing back a frail trail
lost in obscurity -
-unfathomable-

Dreams, suspended among,
dense unceasing thoughts
-dethroned-

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  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the way you wrote this poem, the flow
    of sentences and the ending with a single word..your choice of words captures the heart. Very nicely done!

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    Great job on this piece.
    Wonderful imagery and word choices. Very sad emmotions contained in your words.
    Love Cindy

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    Your choice of words is very good and the descriptions in this piece are very nice giving the reader something to visualize while he/she reads the poem. I also like the stanza format as it was short but it flowed very good and made it easy to read through. The only thing I regret in this poem is the shortness of it. Still I believe you have done a wonderful job with what you have already written. Great job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    In the wake of long shadows
    rose the moon, beside shreds of
    -dreamless stars-

    Now this is creative, the choice of words wrapped in amazing imagination...just beautiful.

    all the best and take care