All that man hath

by EoB   Oct 17, 2011


Lord, I regret to disturb you.
There appears to be some mistake.
Your creation is either imperfect,
or perhaps you meant to partake.

For surely, you never intended
your children to wander thus far,
with naught but a promise to lead them.
You know not how tired we are.

We need nothing more than a whisper
to affirm that this path that we tread
is greater than all of the many
our feet could have suffered instead.

They once did evoke such peace, Lord,
those dreams of your golden Hall.
Now, but a vanishing silhouette
in the haze of all time we recall.

Your memory slowly eludes us,
and the sum of all doubts we suppress,
shadows the hope that you watch, Lord.
Should we cling to it nevertheless?

For what can we tell our children?
When embarking that fateful night,
there surely must have been something
our fathers mistook for a light?

Or was their mistake to follow
a deity they dared not refuse?
Then Lord, I regret to tell you
your sins are without excuse.

Our only fault was to trust you.
For that, we must all atone.
Ahead there awaits a desert
we all must wander alone.

I`ve struggled so much finishing this poem. It began as a vague idea more than a year ago. and since then I have never quite found the same inspiration as I had that evening. I am still not content with the final result, but at least I managed to write that last stanza.

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  • 8 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Amazing piece.kudooz.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jump from Life

    This poem sent chills running up and down my spine! Oh, how many a night I have thought about this! I believe that many people can relate very strongly to this poem, and the way it flowed was miraculous! Truly a stupendous poem! Beautifully penned!

  • 8 years ago

    by Decayed

    I immensely adore poems which talk about relation between God and people.. faith and blasphemy.. all these matters related to our existence.

    And the way you handled your message is really something interesting.

  • 8 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow wow wow amazing woderful poem i am very delighted to have read it you did such fantastic work and you worded it very greatly :) I love love loved it just magnificent and very amazing :) 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Exostosis

    I'd say I'm pretty much content with this composition. The flow is epic. The rhyming scheme does not take away from the message, for the structure is intended as such.

    As for the message, doubting, resenting deities is normal. But it is pretty understandable that upon asking no answer is received. You try only for so long, till you fail to hear an echo.

    Splendid job.

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