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by EoB Aug 26, 2012
Nature, environment /
`Twas hope she once lent us, I see as I gaze,
across the horizon her death sets ablaze.
In view of the twilight engulfing this land,
forgotten, the warmth of my love`s steady hand.
Forgotten, all truth I had once thought divine,
but amid all this splendour, new threads intertwine,
and out of this sun that will never arise,
a thought I see beckon, and am given my prize.
In her bittersweet shimmer, this sun`s dying haze,
an epochal question we never dared face.
Would we sacrifice safety, if God gave us wings,
and dare flee this shadow of needless things?
Wow, reading this poem was like a breath of fresh air. I really loved how it made me feel, and the rhyme scheme made it feel almost like a lullaby. I love the title as well, it caught my eye.
Loved it! :)
This is breathtaking. One of the best rhyming poems I've read in a while, and a very beautiful nature piece. I love the diction you've used and how this flowed with such ease that I had to read this poem aloud. Beautiful.
by Baby Rainbow
I couldn't help but read your first word Twas and then carry on in my head with " the night before christmas " lol. Never really se this word being used in today's language.
I like how you made the rhyming work here and still kept the flow of the poem without making it flawed with forced rhymes. This was well done.
I also like how you end the poem with a very deep question which makes me ponder it for a while after reading.
Interwine should be intertwine?
Nice rhyming scheme you use here, I like that.
I am guessing that the sun represents a loved one?