A flood

by EoB   Mar 30, 2014


In sleep I felt them perish
the winds that once did fan
this futile, aimless anger
that long has troubled man.

A thousand trees, aquiver
fell to quiet ease,
yet ere their final shiver
again arose the breeze.

And as it built to torrents
again I felt my blood,
rise from out its slumber
to unleash a final flood.

And amid the thoughtless violence
of these winds in which I sway,
I see my lover taking
tiny (backward) steps away.

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  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I have read this authors poetry often from time to time and each time I am left with my mouth wide open.
    He has creatively written a poem about the devastation of nature in a metaphoric tone and then tossed me with angles of hidden messages perhaps to a lost loved one, which is why I chose this poem to be highlighted.

    I do need to state, that my reasons for ranking this poem a seven was because of "backward" being in parentheses, I felt it broke the ending a tiny bit, However- I then took a step back and came to the conclusion that he might be trying to add a visualization of impact to the poem and its ending... either way I was really and truly fond of this poem. Beautifully crafted!!

  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    Judges comments

    This poem is nice, hence I can only give it 4 points. I felt if it had a few more stanzas it would be worthy of more. However that said, what has been written is real quality. A good rhyming scheme always helps the flow of a poem and the rhyming here is very natural. There is strong imagery used and the poem feels very dark. I like the old style word use as well here and there. Gives this poem real character. I love the last line which leaves us pondering what is really going on?
    Nice, tight little poem that reads better when you read it aloud.

  • 6 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    This poem is amazing. It is easy to see why it won! I really loved reading this. The whole poem overall flowed perfectly.

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Congratulations on the win!! Well deserved :-)

  • 6 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I enjoyed this piece. The rhymes are well done and the flow is smoothly. It also has some beat (at least when I read it, I feel some beat)

    Congrats on the win