Once upon a Moonlight

Hello there,

i love this one. specially the title..verry catchy..as if i am wandering in the forest.....but in the end theres a piece missing.. the closing line..i don't mean to offend you, just saying my thought..but its beautiful... keep on writing and inspiring... :)

voted 5/5 for this one

Gel

Another beautiful nature poem, painting nature's beauty of the night sky in all its splendor. Stylish, creative and eye-catching, with a lot of appeal to the nature enthusiast.
Undeniably, an eye-catching opening stanza:
Fireflies melt
into moon-eyed shadows
howling lullabies
of nocturne,

Fireflies that melt (=disappear) in moon eyed shadows, with "howling" in a forest, captured as "lullabies" of "nocturne'" (=a beautiful nightscene) is amazingly worded and captures the sounds and sights of a night in a forest, beautifully for the reader. Lastly, the last 2 stanza's capturing the beauty of the night sky in Greek mythology, are superb:
The woods were lovely,
once,

when the night
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.......D

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a blueberry sky,
while Venus kissed
gurgling fountains,
and Sirius picked
wild mushrooms.

A visually pleasing effect ^ "rolled down" as if a curtain was lifted of a theater screen from the night sky, revealing the color of a "blueberry", seems so original and lovely. Venus kissing gurgling fountains reminds me of the extraordinary Palazzo Venus Fountain, in Rome, which features the Goddess of Love with water trickling down from her pitcher and encircling fountains from below her feet, mesmerizing to the visitor. But Sirius, the 2 headed hunting dog of Orion, picking mushrooms (since when did he become vegetarian? )...that one had me laughing all the way! I guess, in a poet's eyes anything is possible :) A heavenly poem that caught my "nature" eye this week.

(From Judging comment 2-12-12 & 2-19-12)

Yes,I can imagine that scene..."Into moon-eyed shadows,gurgling fountains,a blueberry sky..!
WoW that was wonderful,holds the essence of nature,the beauty !
N'joyed reading..Appericiated !!

Hi

Love this new style, free in form even well written
BR
Ole

Oh what a beautiful and elegant piece.... very pretty~