While You Sleep (Senryu)

by mossgirl19   Jun 6, 2017


You breathe next to me
Eyes closed, innocent they are
Lay still, I’m just here.

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  • 2 years ago

    by Oluwaseye Olayode Taiwo


    Well written and insightful

  • 2 years ago

    by Fredy Sanchez CZBOH

    Im amazed at your ability to convey such beautiful and deep emotions within 3 lines... and that you're able to do it multiple times... I've been reading your senryu(s?) And they're top-notch! Great job

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    Love the sentiment in this

  • 2 years ago

    by Lvi

    Watching someone sleep is really wonderful and calming-
    The way they breathe and all the minute details about them and of course the eyes.
    And the ending... 'I am here', that's the only thing we need to hear sometimes.

    Amazing and well written.
    I really liked the piece. :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael

    Very good mossgirl :)

    Michael

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