Paint the Town a Dream

Judging comment:

I understand where the poet is coming from. And I understand where she is going. Who doesn’t wish to paint his wretched homeland a dream? The tone is captivating, and the fact that a very simple diction was used highlights the idea of the town’s pale façade. It is really hard to live a grey life in a grey area, where every day is similar, and the rivers flow but backwards. The reader can sense the frustration, yet the never-ending hope, all throughout the stanzas. And in this lies the beauty of the piece.

Judging comments:
Nee’s wonderful blend of gratitude at being where she is, homesickness for where she is not and sympathy for those who do not get to share the rich colours of her life are so excellently expressed here. It feels as though she is torn between the joy she feels for herself and guilt for knowing others dear to her cannot share her joy. Beautiful symbolism throughout. :-) x
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This is lovely. The entire poem is beautifully written but the final two stanzas are my favourite.

Breathtaking

I love the innocence in this, the youth and the adventure of a new discovery. A world of colors, of perhaps new perception, of a newfound meaning of home.

Beautifully written...