Escaping the Sun

by Star   Mar 27, 2020


Notes of silence slide over my body,
I lay there breathing in pure oxygen.

Shadows performing their rituals around me,
it’s dark but I can see the compacted sun.

I’m trying to untie the glowing shackles
shutting my weary eyes tightly

eliminating the light that strangled
and burnt my throat.

    report violation
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  • 4 years ago

    by prasanna

    A beautiful piece about insomnia! I really love the imagery of the last couplet

    "eliminating the light that strangled
    and burnt my throat."

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Personally, I believe beauty can be a message in itself. The very best kind, perhaps.
    Take care, Star

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      As long as it inspires people!!
      Thank you so much ^_^

  • 4 years ago

    by BOB GALLO

    It saddens me that poems beautiful like this, full of imaginative portrays do not portray any message.

    Maybe I am wrong, but we can not confine art only to beauty. Or could we? Perhaps only the matter of opinion.

    Though, wonderful as always.

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      Interesting !!
      That means I failed to send my message through :)

      Thank you Bob!!

    • 4 years ago

      by BOB GALLO

      You did not fail. If you did, we all do, because we always come short from perfection. And perfection never can be achieved, unless in the end, for after ( perfection) there are no where to go.

      We are here trying to exchange some words to see each other through one another eyes. It increases our angles, therefore improves our creativity more so the capacity of our creativity.

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      And that is exactly why I like to post my poetry here, not in any other platform. Because only here I can grow with my writings. I get honest feedback from different people that sometime contradict each other, which is interesting and inspiring. :)
      I am no where near perfect I'm sure of that, and it is not a problem all!!!

    • 4 years ago

      by BOB GALLO

      good good

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