by Robert Apr 28, 2005
category :
Life, society /
other
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Did I do everything right, what did I leave out, |
by Jaymes Haze
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I'm going to have to say that this is supposedly an attempt to show someone's plight in trying to show someone, probably important to them, the way to get through life. |
by sweet escape
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Once again you capture the meaning you wish to display and your paint it for everybody to see. the only thing i have to say is that he diffrent lenghts of the stanzas throws off the flow a little but it was great and i give it a 5. |
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Hmm i never seen a poem that hits upon being a parent quite this way, i also like the way you chose to express yourself with your imagination, great work hope to see more - |
by she
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This is really sweet,shows youre love for them |
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Real good vocab in this one again you really choose you words carfully and i like that xxx alex xxx |