Lifeless

by january friend   Sep 6, 2006


I heard of your death
Tragic yes
But not everyone cares
As I do
Swimming in a murky depth
It dwells alone
Under rock and reef
Like a knife
It pierces your chest
Pierces my heart
In another's perspective
So in mine
The truth comes into my mind slowly
Taking time for me to believe
That you are gone
...forever...
Blond streaks fall across your face
As I look into bright blue eyes
That are drained of life
Blood stains the water red
...goodbye...
Though I will never forget
wounds heal somewhat
As years pass
And you begin to fade in my mind
But never fade completely
Goodbye

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  • 14 years ago

    by Broken Masquerade

    Wow.. i can really relate to this. It was beautifully written with such strong emotion. I love the last lines "And you begin to fade in my mind. But never fade completely. Goodbye" It makes me want to cry, I completely understand this feeling.. when you begin to forget little details.. but you will never forget them.. anyway this was amazing, flawlessly written. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done :) 5/5 for suree :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Rocky

    That was a really sad poem with some excelent imagery. i liked the free verse style of it as i find most other styles very generic. and the ending was perfect. i reallyloved these lines
    "But never fade completely
    Goodbye"

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    A sad write, yet very beautiful. very sweet, and quite heartfelt. wonderful job. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 15 years ago

    by joanne

    This was reallly good. it reminded me of how i felt bout my friend kyle dying i was the only one that couldnt be sad and i was the one that loved him most.he was like my brother.

    -joanne

  • 16 years ago

    by njabulo b

    Mmh! that was a good sad poem, your poems are real touching.

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