Subside

by Sydney   May 13, 2007


I hear your voice
and I start to drown
You strike me once
and I'm down to the ground

This misery I felt before
does not compare
These crystallized tears
are becoming so bare

That feeling I felt
must no longer be
I'm trying so hard
but I must flee

Theres no escape,
no way to get away
Shall I take this life
and subside to my dismay?

Maybe I should,
the time seems right
I grip the trigger
and pull tight...

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  • 18 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    As sad poems go, this was a great write. You really write beautiful sad poems. I can't I can relate to this one myself but that doesn't take away that it's an amazing write. I also love the depth and emotion you potrayed here. 5/5

    marcella

  • 18 years ago

    by Debbie

    Nice to see how enchanting this piece is. Your words, though they never conjured mental images, certainly generated certain heartrending feelings and emotions. I believed it is the major highlight of this poem. On the whole, this poem was written quite well and sound. Nicely done. 5/5 ~Debbie

  • 18 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Your poem gave me goosebumps! short but to the point, very nice. good job <3

  • 18 years ago

    by Brittney

    To only be 12 this poem is great. There were certain parts that did seem to be a little be forced. It was a great poem though and the imagrey was amazing. Loved it. 5/5
    *Brittney

  • 18 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    This was amazing!!How well you have written this!!I can realte to it so well.
    Good job in this piece!!
    Best wishes
    And take care.

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