Why i left

by Dee   Jun 4, 2007


I would do anything to kiss you again
or to be held tightly in your arms
the feelings you gave me
makes me wounder why i ever left

i left because your complicated
your 19 have a kid and her mum
but you still made time for me
i miss you so much

I would do anything to wake up next to you
and to hold you while you sleep
i miss all those nights,
i wounder why i ever left

i left because you chose her
your daughter i mean
is that a reason to leave?
why did i walk away?

I would do anything to see your smile
and look into your deep green eyes
these moments we had
makes me wounder why i ever left

I left because i couldn't wait
you had problems to sort out
i wanted you all mine
now i have nothing

I would do anything to turn back time
and to have never walked away
but i did and it hurts
i wish i never left

i left for a reason
i was hurting so much
you used me and would of kept doing it
thats why i left
but that doesn't stop me from loving you

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  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This is what i mean i love it, over all perfect even the flow were so smooth and the mixture of different emotions were great!! Keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I like this because its made me realise and think a lot about someone in my life, i like how you have expressed about not stopped loving him even though he has hurt you. again, i think your talent is very good xxxxxxxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    To me there are two ways to write one to the general public and the other to a privite party. I feel with out knowing the history of the person you are writing this poem too the general reader gets lost. Not saying this is bad it just different in the type of audience your writing for. Just a thought Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Your first stanza?
    Very raw emotions.

    i left because [[you're]] complicated
    [[your're]] 19[[,]] have a kid[[,]] and her mum
    but you still made time for me
    i miss you so much

    You should collaborate more on the whole
    Complicated one.
    It's not very discriptive.

    I would do anything to wake up next to you
    That's a really strong sentence.
    It kind of contradicts with your other sentences, though.
    If you say "I'd do anything"
    It usually means.. well you'd do anything.

    i [[wounder]] why i ever left
    It's wonder, dear.

    Hmm..
    Your ending was pretty great.
    But I didn't really like your poem that much.
    It was confusing.
    Not the good confusing that makes you wonder.
    The confusing that makes you befuddled.
    4/5, dear.

  • 16 years ago

    by LuvLyLynn

    This was a beautifully written poem and it was interesting to read... You got talent and I hope to read more of your work... I like the emotion that you put into it and how I know that some people can relate to this... Keep up the good work... :)

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