Here is to You..

by So Wrong its Right   Jun 6, 2007


Goodbye to you
my friend, my love
i will never forget you,
no matter how hard i try

our spontaneous moments together
always brightened my day,
you may not feel like i do
but that is perfectly ok

here is to the volleyball games
you would always come and watch,
here is to every passing period
we would laugh, talk, and smile

here is to the classes we shared
there was never a dull moment,
here is to the nicknames
we laughed about and made up

your smile, your eyes
have left a mark in my heart
but finally, here is to you my love
for making my everyday special

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  • 18 years ago

    by DeathlyAmore

    I like the poem. The flow was moderate.

    Good job, however...

    You must work on your grammar and punctuation mate. This is my true honest opinion, ad comas and periods! Put capital letters where they belong!

    I can not under any circumstances give you a five with all those grammar and punctuation mistakes.

    It was your 'Very best'. It's good, not excellent. What else... ah that's right. You must work on higher vocabulary! Work on really amazing vocabulary. Like... Desolated, or Tenebrous. ect, cetera.

    I simply ADORE words like that, and maybe put the definition at the bottom so if the reader doesn't understand the word, they will now!

    See? Get a dictionary and a thesaurus and master your words to your fullest potential!!

    It's a good poem. No doubt.

    [Voted 4]

    _Sam

  • 18 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    Very good poem had alot of emotion 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Great work yet again, the flow and emotion within was great. Keep it up.

    Peace, Joe

  • 18 years ago

    by turtle

    That was a lovely poem!

    But i agree with emma, try dividing them into equal lines. It could help "smoothen" the flow a bit more...

    overall, the vocab and emotion was great in the entire piece. gratz on a job well done! :)

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful penned tribute to a friend, yet well expressed emotions you portray here, with friend would be great, with loved one would be be wonderful, but without them it would be like (Beach without Sand) Beautiful written!

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