What gives you the right.

I think the change in flow of last line made it stand out more, hence making more of an impact on the reader, its not something you'l forget in a hurry!
well done!

Short & sweet! You could probably go a bit further with this, but its still a great poem! =]]

Ok the last one i read was better then this one only because that last line broke the flow.. besides that oit was a really good poem.. and its sjut my opinion about the last line thing.. also its not really a bad thin but these are like the shortest poem ive ever read lol... it will probably make it easier for people to read them on here though still a good poem 4/5

A very powerful piece!
You've raised a lot of questions here about why someone would do that and throw it all away
For a short poem, it hits hard
5/5
*gem*