The "lonely mountain" you use here reminds me so much of Lord of the Rings, but your play on the word lonely drags the reader so much deeper.
While reading, I pictured this weighted ball you described spinning furiously inside of you, churning anxiousness within you, so unstoppable. It enforces the writers feeling of helplessness. Visually, this is a stunning piece. Emotionally, this is a heart-wrenching one.
The weight we all carry within ourselves makes it harder and harder to walk on, put one foot in front of the other. And you aren't sure why you were lead to take such a difficult path in your life. The wintry feel you've placed here implies the readers surrender to this emotion, how it's overtaken them. I like how the end is really just suspended with unanswered questions...
3 years ago
Along time ago Nana and I were talking about our favourite writes on PnQ and she named this one and one of her all time favourites, after I read it it was easy to see why and so I added it to my own favourites. I've read this piece so many times now i could probably recite it lol
The way you describe those feelings of the thought of being lonely and how loneliness can be percieved is just epic. I know this is written from a womans point of view but it translates to every one, for me this poem signifies not only what the poem is about but how we as writers use language and imagery to say what we wanna say.
An earth shattering piece of writing, really i can't say enough about it.