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Wow! Fanstastic! The flow is perfect, everything rymes perfectly, perfect! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!! I would give it a hundred if I could, but since I can't, I'll give it a five!!!!!!!

Very storng....and applies to many people in this world.

These are a very powerful bit of words you've written. I think most would be able to relate. The whole poem had pretty good flow, except for the first two lines...

I'm sad but you don't know it.
I'm angry but won't show it.

^^^I think to keep flow, you might want to make sure your adding your commas, so that the reader knows where to pause for effect.

I'm angry(comma) but I'll never show it
I'm sad (comma) but you'll never know it.

I changed the first two lines a bit when I added in the comma's, because you seem to be switching tenses a lot, and it seems that the future tense would emphasize your point a little better. Just a suggestion though. Other wise this piece is heart wrenching, and beautiful all at the same time...Not an easy combination for any poet. 5/5

This poem was short and to the point. I really enjoyed it. The only problem, was there was a little bit of flow problems in the middle. Other than that, I enjoyed it and still gave it a 5/5! [:

Love the rhyme, especially in this stanza:

"You think it's all just perfect.
And that's how I prefer it."

The first of your sad poems that I've read and I love it just as much as your happy ones! Flow, structure, rhyme, rhythm all spot on. But what else could I expect?! 5/5

Em xXx