HEART ACHE

by Lozbi   Jun 17, 2007


HEART ACHE

my heart is torn
my heart is broken
why did you have to
rip it open

my eyes are swollen
my face is wet
it's all your fault
that i'm so upset

i tried to remember
the happy times
but the little fights and arguments
just crept back into my mind

the smile you seen
i'm afraid to say
it wasn't even real
just a fake to cover up my pain

it hurts to think about
how we could be
my dear friend,
how could you do this to me....

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  • 16 years ago

    by SuperJenius

    It was so simply written, but I was still able to see the emotion in the poem. I would not have minded if it was a little longer but I have written a few short poems myself.

    Overall, I thought the poem was good. It was laiden with emotion and it was almost as if I could feel your pain. It was good.

  • 16 years ago

    by So Wrong its Right

    That was soooooo good! every time i comment on people's poems, i am shocked at all of the talent that is on this site. 5/5!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by SeXiSaMi

    I love this poem.. it flows great.. the words just all fit perfect... definitely felt all the emotion in this one! great job. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mel

    I liked this. the flow was almost perfect, and the word choice was good. good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by paul alexander

    I lthink this is good i really like it, keep on writing

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