EMOTIONAL RIDE

by Lozbi   Jun 17, 2007


EMOTIONAL RIDE

nothing is going right
it seems like nothing ever will
the hurt isn't going away
the pain is just standing still

the girl that i used to be
is fading away slowly
each day becoming
more and more lonely

no one quite understands
what i've been through
this is just to tell you
only a quick preview

it feels like no one cares
and it's like i don't deserve to be here
i'm just here to make others happy
while i shed tear after tear

most of the time
i keep all of the pain inside
but then there's days like today
when i take the emotional ride

By Loren McCormack
29th March, 2007

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. I loved the word choice. It also had a nice flow to it. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Ive = I've
    i= I
    its= it's
    im= I'm
    ^ I'm really bothered by this kind of mistakes.
    Except these mistakes, poem is good, but you could use more punctuation in it.
    I'll give you 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Beautifully written, excellent flow, brillant word choice and strong emotions well penned. you did an excelent job on this poem I would have to say that it is perfect, I see no room for improvement here 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by miss insecurity

    Hey :]
    i really enjoyed reading all your poems XD
    i liked i love.. the best but this is the one i ended up commenting

    it has pretty great flow and its really emotional :]

    you have some great talent :P

    hope to see you write some more poems :P

  • 16 years ago

    by Krazikoko

    Wow this one is reeally good!!I felt a rythym while I read it.

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