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by [M(/)U] Jan 10, 2019
I still cup my hands over my ears
to hear your tears fade and fly –
or perhaps to encircle
the world like a song unsung.
I would close my eyes
as tightly as hands
your tears (or whatever they are)
rising, shining, quivering -
to fall and wither like the breath
that follows your melody.
(I wonder why you never understood
how beautiful your songs were).
Some really pretty imagery here! I think it suffers in the second and third stanzas with the use of ‘whatever’ and ‘close my eyes tightly as hands’ sounds a little awkward. I can’t imagine it.
The final stanza is lovely, and demonstrates some nice verb use. :)
by Milly Hayward
A beautiful piece. The song of tears, what a lovely concept. Milly x
This is truly beautiful.
by Ben Pickard
Wonderfully written Glad to see it nominated.
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