subtle truth

by Star   Jun 3, 2021


you thought walls don’t move
but they do
you lean on them quietly
and they take you in

it’s not the fantasy of
nine and three quarters,
there’s nothing on the
other side

there’s only you
and the train of denial

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  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Hey star, the title 'subtle truth' could, I feel, be about anything for example when a lady asks 'does my bum look big in this' and theor partner isn't entirely honest so as not to hurt them. Unfortunately, we do this a lot as human beings, here in the UK we call it beating about the bush - what a saying haha.

    you thought walls don’t move
    but they do
    you lean on them quietly
    and they take you in
    ^
    The image of walls taking us in as we lean on them is as far fetched as walls talking though would be good if we were lonely, like me, just to be hugged even if it's a wall.. I'm weird, I know. I do like this though.. There's a deeper meaning in there but I can't seem to r think of it..

    it’s not the fantasy of
    nine and three quarters,
    there’s nothing on the
    other side
    ^
    I love the reference to Harry Potter here, well played!
    there’s only you
    and the train of denial
    ^
    This is ending is just, wow because for the most part in life we only have ourselves to blame for the things that go wrong as we could change them and I still believe this after longstanding abusive and controlling relationship, I still blame myself for not leaving sooner but there comes a time in our lives that we say 'enough is enough' and have done with it. I like the imagery of a 'train of denial' following someone around, it would hurt but I'm guessing it will be just desserts.

    Congratulations on the win,
    Take care,
    Em x

    • 4 months ago

      by Star

      LOL you are very right about the title it really could be anything :)

      Also I’m sad to hear about your relationship, no one should go through that!!

      Thank you so much Em your comments are always great!

  • 4 months ago

    by Everlasting

    Ouch. I love the tone. The flow. And if I hadn’t read MaryAnnes comment, I wouldn’t have link this to Harry Potter. I am tempted to show this piece to my husband, he usually gets references pretty easily. Specially from Harry Potter. I wonder what he would say?

    I like this piece.

    Congratulations on the win!

    • 4 months ago

      by Star

      So what did he say? Lo
      Thanks Luce ^_^

  • 4 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Congratulations on this clever piece :)

    • 4 months ago

      by Star

      Thanks Keira :)

  • 4 months ago

    by hiraeth

    Congrats!

    • 4 months ago

      by Star

      Thank you Mr. Darcy and Hiraeth :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations!

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