Forever and always

by Blake   Oct 13, 2007


Love is one of the most pain full things
you let someone in close to you then
once you start getting comfortable
they tear your heart out. well...
at least thats what happened to me.
i let you in my heart and you lead
me to believe that you loved me
and i wanted to stay with you for
the rest of my life but one day
it all went away. like last night
how could you do that to me
you tell me that all this
is not working out...it was like
a bad dream, but at that moment
i didn't wake up so i knew it was
real. then i start to cry then you
yell at me. why couldn't you be there
with me and then we could have maybe
worked things out but i guess not...so
i will have to let you go
forever and always

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  • 15 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Beautifully writen. one of my favorite of urs. truly an amazing job you have done here. Please keep it up! 5/5

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy

  • 16 years ago

    by Woe

    Wow. a male with emotion... =D i love this sooo much! you should punctuate it though. i know it seems unneccessary but really it makes alot of difference... <3 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mimi

    For a beginner you're not that bad.

    If you want pointers, first, I wld say to add some syntax to make it easier to read.
    This other stuff is purely on how you want it to be. Lyke personally I lyke my poems to rhyme and I try toput vivid imagery and strong diction to really make hu ever's reading it to get how i was feeling.

    you've got alot of potential. just remember the most important thing is to make it meaningful to you and just express yourself

  • 16 years ago

    by theUSEDheart

    Wow... that is so good.......i wish... wow i love it good job!!! im speachless

  • 16 years ago

    by Blake

    Thanks lisa =]