Homeland

Mark, did it, before me, but it's alright.

Star! I can feel it all over me. This piece takes everything in the reader. I LOVE your poetry!

I like it. It’s dreamy. I like the soft voice. I also just woke up for the fifth time. it’s a good read to have early in the morning. It made me feel serene.

This is a very dreamy poem, Star. It's also very you! I mean that as a compliment aha.

I enjoyed the personification of the moon, and the romantic tones throughout. I believe the second stanza pales a little bit for a couple of reasons:

Tonight,
your luminous face
outshines the stars
and I surrender
to your glowing
silence.

I feel you could replace 'luminous' as you have 'illuminated' in the prior stanza. It may have been intentional but I still even feel that 'luminous face' is a little strange sounding. I also feel 'your glowing silence' is a bit awkward too. The 'your' before doesn't actually need to be there either, as it's implied. :)

'there is a land
behind
the immersed
sun,
where
its only moon
is you.'

The simplicity and effectiveness of this is incredibly hard to achieve. A beautiful end to a beautifully penned poem.

I call dibs on nominating this!!

omg